toonlet: Tip #4: Less Text, More Story

Tip #4: Less Text, More Story

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Warhol - happy: HAPPY NEW YEAR! TONIGHT I WANT TO TALK ABOUT DIALOGUE IN YOUR TOONS.
Warhol - explaining 2 hands: COMICS AREN’T LIKE BOOKS OR ESSAYS. INSTEAD OF LONG PARAGRAPHS OF TEXT
Warhol - explaining1: COMICS CAN TELL A COMPLETE STORY IN A FEW WORDS OR SENTENCES.
Warhol - point right up2: OTHER THINGS CAN REPLACE SOME OF THE WORDS.
Warhol - cowboy: CHARACTER EXPRESSIONS, CLOTHING, PROPS OR ZAZZ CAN CONVEY MEANING.
Warhol - point left down: LET'S TAKE A LOOK AT A COMIC I MADE AND SEE HOW WE CAN SIMPLIFY IT.
Liza - Normal: HI ANDY! WELCOME!
IT WAS LATE OCTOBER, 1978. I WAS AT A FABULOUS HALLOWEEN PARTY GIVEN BY LIZA MINELLI.
Warhol - Queen Elizabeth: HI LIZA! GREAT PARTY!
IT WAS A COSTUME PARTY. I WENT DRESSED AS QUEEN ELIZABETH AT HER CORONATION.
Extra People - Debbie Harry: HI ANDY! GOOD TO SEE YOU.
EVERYONE FAMOUS AND COOL WAS THERE, LIZ TAYLOR, MICK JAGGER AND EVEN DEBBIE HARRY.
Warhol - Queen Elizabeth2: HOW STRANGE!
I WAS AT THE PARTY FOR ABOUT A HALF HOUR, AND I NOTICED SOMETHING WEIRD.
Warhol - Queen Elizabeth3: THIS IS AWFUL!
NO ONE WAS WEARING A COSTUME EXCEPT FOR ME! I HAD MADE A HUGE MISTAKE!
Extra People - Liz Taylor1: IT'S OKAY, ANDY. NO ONE EVEN NOTICED.
LIZ TAYLOR SAW HOW FOOLISH I FELT. SHE WAS VERY UNDERSTANDING ABOUT IT.
Warhol - explaining 2 hands: SO THERE IS OUR COMIC. BELIEVE IT OR NOT, I CAN CUT IT IN HALF
Warhol - point left up: THE STORY WILL BE THE SAME, ONLY BRIEFER AND EASIER TO READ!
Warhol - point left down: TAKE A LOOK AT HOW I DID IT BELOW.
Warhol - Queen Eliz zazz: FABULOUS PARTY LIZA! I LOVE HALLOWEEN!
Liza - pointing: ANDY! DEBBIE HARRY IS LOOKING FOR YOU. SHE’S OVER BY MICK JAGGER!
Warhol - Queen Eliz 3 zazz: NO ONE ELSE IS DRESSED UP! HOW AWFUL!
Extra People - Liz Taylor1: IT’S OKAY ANDY. IT’S 1978! EVERYONE IS TOO COKED UP TO NOTICE!
Warhol - Talking tilt head: SEE THAT? INSTEAD OF 6 FRAMES, I HAVE 4 NOW!
Warhol - explaining1: INSTEAD OF 100 WORDS, I HAVE LESS THAN 50!
Warhol - Pointing @ you: HERE ARE SOME RULES TO KEEP IN MIND.
Warhol - explaining 2 hands: 1. TRY TO KEEP EACH FRAME BELOW 3 LINES OF TEXT.
Warhol - point left up: 2. TRY TO KEEP EACH COMIC UNDER 9 FRAMES. REWORD IF NECESSARY TO SHORTEN IT.
Warhol - happy: 3. SPLIT LONGER STORIES UP INTO MULTIPLE STRIPS!

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More Text, More Toonupby Cuervolinda
CL_Question - A. Default: WE REALIZE WE'RE HYPOCRITES! 25 FRAMES FOR THIS TIP IS NOT BRIEF!
CL_Question - Perplexed: BUT WE WANTED TO EXPLAIN IT IN DETAIL SO YOU UNDERSTOOD.
CL_Question - Pondering: IF YOU HAVE A QUESTION FOR ANDY, POST IT HERE.
CL_Happy - A: IF WE USE IT YOU WILL APPEAR IN AN UPCOMING TOONUP STRIP!

CL_Question - A. Default: WE REALIZE WE'RE HYPOCRITES! 25 FRAMES FOR THIS TIP IS NOT BRIEF!
CL_Question - Perplexed: BUT WE WANTED TO EXPLAIN IT IN DETAIL SO YOU UNDERSTOOD.
CL_Question - Pondering: IF YOU HAVE A QUESTION FOR ANDY, POST IT HERE.
CL_Happy - A: IF WE USE IT YOU WILL APPEAR IN AN UPCOMING TOONUP STRIP!

Re: Tip #4: Less Text, More Storyby Half
Half (wiggly) - sleeeep: SHHHH. DON'T TELL ANYONE BUT MORE THAN 4 PANELS AND I STOP READING.

Tip #4: Less Text, More Story

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